評詩：碗博翻譯陸游《游山西村》大作精彩！賞析幾句：
陸游原文：七律 《游山西村》
莫笑農家臘酒渾，豐年留客足雞豚。
山重水複疑無路，柳暗花明又一村。
簫鼓追隨春社近，衣冠儉樸古風存。
從今若許閒乘月，拄杖無時夜叩門。
碗博譯作原玉："A Tour of Mountain West Village" by Southern Song Poet Lu You
Better not laugh about the rough winter spirits in a farm country,
guests treated in harvest year with bonanza of pork and poultry.
mountains and rivers run endless as paths are increasingly few,
a villa of shady willow grove and bright floral alleys jump in view.
Embraced by a music band as approaching commune of spring,
everyone seen sticks to the ancient norm and in plain dressing.
Should there be chance in the future for more leisure moon ride,
gonna drop in with my walking stick to knock on door any night.
還是先 walk through the sentences：
莫笑農家臘酒渾
Better not laugh about the rough winter spirits in a farm country,
--- 感覺rough用得好，粗製也，非精餾，體現村釀的“渾”。另外剛看到碗博跟帖討論“臘酒”或譯為winter wine 還有 winter rum 更妥，個見還是winter spirits貼切。原因：rum 太親美，就是為了老美們看得懂。哈哈。但中國迄今不會釀rum。wine 太葡萄了，古代中國不會釀，所以葡萄酒成了稀罕物，多從西域弄來。所以古詩才有“葡萄美酒夜光杯”，葡萄酒成美酒了。“spirits”好在一是泛稱，二是讀着就像燒酒，中國古農村都是糧食酒，不燒也燒，三是spirits聽着頗廉價，側面地對應那個“渾”字。
豐年留客足雞豚
guests treated in harvest year with bonanza of pork and poultry.
--- 超喜歡這個bonanza。因為米國有個牛仔電視連續劇叫這個名字。哈哈
山重水複疑無路
mountains and rivers run endless as paths are increasingly few,
--- increasingly 這個字不喜。越來越few，譯為越來越“增加了”few，總覺得有點兒彆扭，為啥不說越來越“少到”few涅？還是E文有這樣的習慣？
山重水複疑無路，柳暗花明又一村。
a villa of shady willow grove and bright floral alleys jump in view.
“村”肯定是個village，但villa可以接受，也很美，意思不偏。jump in view 三字精彩，突然閃入眼帘，恰符陸游“柳暗花明又一村”的詩意，俺是想不出！
簫鼓追隨春社近
Embraced by a music band as approaching commune of spring,
--- embraced 譯“追隨”，比follow更生動。值得一提的是：commune 這個字忒妙了，公社也，原始公社也，巴黎公社也，但極左可就成了communism，極右則成了capitalist社區。哈哈哈。其實，它恰是中國古代村鎮裡的“社”！無論拜祭祖先神靈、為順應節氣組織活動、大型集會、示威遊行都在這兒聚首。最後總是場子裡排桌擺酒，老人們坐大堂裡面，放不下的人通通外面，熱鬧一番才罷，估計陸游沒少經歷“家家扶得醉人歸”這種場面。其實國外村鎮也有類似場所，西部牛仔地區，這個場所多為小鎮教堂前面的courtyard，有事兒要組織活動都是那兒，最後大家一起喝酒跳方舞進入高潮。
衣冠儉樸古風存。
everyone seen sticks to the ancient norm and in plain dressing.
--- 好！stick to the ancient norm
從今若許閒乘月
Should there be chance in the future for more leisure moon ride,
--- moon ride 應該是個固定詞組，“乘（借）着月光出遊”是也。不知俺理解當否？
拄杖無時夜叩門
gonna drop in with my walking stick to knock on door any night.
--- 用字精確。
全篇流暢無滯，每行字數大致相同，用 aabbccdd 布局押諧韻，吟誦起來旋律感很強。而用字考究精確則是碗博一貫的風格。大讚！
