《凉州词》唐 王之涣
黄河远上白云间，一片孤城万仞山。羌笛何须怨杨柳，春风不度玉门关。

译作一（豌博）
Masterpiece Poetry by Tang Dynasty Poet Wang Zhihuan
"The Outer Frontier: Lyrics of Liangzhou”

The Yellow River projects upward and afar in the midst of white clouds, 
a lone fortress lies in a mountain range of ten thousand feet in elevations. 
Don't blame the local Qiang flute is singing the aspen and willow blues,
as no spring wind blows pass the Jade-Entry Gate onto northern frontiers.

--- 大赞豌兄力作！信达雅三者皆看出构思的苦心。这首诗不好译主要在其格调之雄浑，那种令人一诵，心胸顿阔，有思马寻刀的冲动。豌兄译作全篇流畅无滞，E文笔力俺不能及也。最喜这句

cuz spring winds never blow across Yumen Pass to the distal frontiers. 

说不出的荒远感慨意味。再赞佳译！

译作二（职老）

the yellow river upto the-gaps-among white clouds
where dwell between mountains an isolated city
don't sad cowboy, nowhere of spring willow
the Jade Gate stops southern breezes

--- 小牧陋作，指点几句：

黄河之上白云间
the yellow river upto the-gaps-among white clouds
译文虽允许贴切合理的再创作，可这句里的gaps是否多余？是根据“白云间”得来的，对不对？原诗中这三个字就是虚写，那个“间”是不用翻译出来的。另外“黄河”不会自己专找白云的缝隙才“远上”，要是没缝隙涅？黄河就打住了是吗？译得太谬！

一片孤城万仞山
where dwell between mountains an isolated city
dwell 是居住的意思，是有生命的才能做出来的行为：只能人居住在城里，不是城居住在山里。

羌笛何须怨杨柳
don't sad cowboy, nowhere of spring willow
羌笛译作cowboy虽令人捧腹，但可接受。因为也许那笛子正是cowboy吹的，虽多少有抄袭“牧童横坐黄牛背，短笛无腔信口吹”的嫌疑，却别有诗意。

春风不度玉门关
the Jade Gate stops southern breezes
这句么，不失大格，但 southern breeze 似不如 spring breeze 亮眼。为啥涅？原文中“春风”是对“杨柳”的呼应，是刻意强调出来以渲染此地的偏远荒凉，所谓的“诗眼”是也。你却非说 southern breeze 就是春风，那“东风”不是春风？

应该说全篇译得不成功，唯有第三句cowboy意境颇具特点。

译作三 跟着豌博，试译王之涣的《凉州词》（曹雪葵）

《The Lyrics of Liangzhou》

The Huanghe River originates itself through the white clouds,
From where the sky and the earth meet.
A lonely fortress that the sorrow fog shrouds, 
Surrounded by the mountains above ten thousand feet. 
In the flute of the native Qiang tribe,
lingers a tone,longing to see the willows.
They never know the desert is so wide,
That  the Yumen Pass beyond no spring wind blows.

--- 豌博评论：哈哈曹博自成一格，不拘文体，全然意译，颇有逆袭王老的节奏
--- 雪葵答复：俺自己都觉得对不住王老了。呵呵。