Restlessly to the east, the Yangtze of torrents roars,
Seeing the historic heroes passing as it pours,
--- seeing 有新意，从另一个角度译“淘”字

It is taken that located at the west of the fort
Is the Red cliff battle field , a famous resort,
--- 述景

Rugged peaks are pokingto thesky
Dashing waves are smashing high.
--- dash 用得给力！

The picturesque landscape is so beautiful
That it attracts so many heroic souls to devote their lives.
--- 好！感觉毛太祖的“江山如此多娇，引无数英雄竞折腰”源自此句！

Back to the era of the three kingdoms, Zhou Lang won his fame
The young general managed to bit the strong enemy in the game.
--- 个见，稍嫌赘。

He just married Miss Qiao, the famous beauty of the land
--- beauty of the land，好！

Wearing head scarf of the time and with a feather fan in hand.
--- 介个“纶巾”和译起来很烦人哪，俺干脆不译。苏轼这句就是为说明周公瑾乃儒将，其实有把扇子足可渲染这一点儿了。而苏轼用“羽扇纶巾”是汉语习惯使然。哈哈

As he ordered to fight while talking and made others admire
Beating up the enemy's fleet to smokes and ashes on fire.
--- 感觉不如干脆就是set the enemy's fleet on fire

You may laugh at me for my gray hair too early grown
Due to the personal sentimental characters of my own.
--- 好！押韵好，且极贴切！

I water the spirit to the moon shallowed in the water,
For human’s life is but a tour of a dreamer.
--- 别有新意，而不离开原作字义！好！

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