【老戰士永遠不死】

        - 與老隨便職老直言談詩歌翻譯的意境

看了職老直言的翻譯，都有為賦新詩強說愁的感覺, 做作的痕跡太明顯，這就叫無病呻吟，他們年輕人那裡能夠體會老戰士的意境？畢竟是經歷不夠，老隨還可以，職業直言都是金字塔下的家雁。感覺根本不對，不知道什麼是老戰士的情懷, 什麼衝冠一怒，格調完全不對。所以難於了解中國. 不過老職還算有一點現代色彩和鄉土味。

古人說，不到瀟湘豈有詩，沒有經歷，文字再好，也是建立在沙灘上的大廈。不會有高度。文字可以慢慢改，而經歷則是在房子裡面體會不來的。豬圈豈生千里馬，花盆難養萬年松。不經歷風雨怎能見彩虹. 未曾哭過長夜的人，不足以語人生。所以極右派的理論總是脫離實際,脫離人民。

那麼，根據這個精神，我把第一段翻譯一下，但不限於原來的文字而在於意境。

老戰士永遠不死

MC

老戰士的謝幕，依然是豪情滿懷
漫天晚霞，是他們生命燃燒的燦爛
軍歌怒吼，震散天邊最後一片雲采

雖然聖賢們早知陰陽變幻
智慧的火花不敵自然閃電
他們的離去，依然奪目光彩.

不要溫柔的入夢

老傢伙要喝點酒罵罵人

傍晚時刻，氣氣那牛逼哄哄卻即將跟屁的白晝

。。。。。。

直言：

不要謙卑地消逝於夜幕
燃燒吧！咆哮吧！垂老者，在黯淡的黃昏
怒吼，為白晝行將終結，衝冠一怒

原文：

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright
Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight
And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight
Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

And you, my father, there on the sad height,
Curse, bless me now with your fierce tears, I pray.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.